I am blue. I have the ability to make peope feel relaxed that's how awesome I am. I can come in different shades like dark blue, light blue, blue-green or just blue.
I am part of the two biggest things in the world, the sky and the ocean. People can't get enough of me because I am so beautiful. I show up everywhere. I'm the colors of some peoples eyes, the colors of the lines on lined paper, the color of pens and crayons, and even the color of some cars. I can even be the color of some ones shirt, shoes or pants. I even have my own spot in the rainbow.
When people get asked what their favorite color is and they don't know they are most likely to choose me, blue, because that is all they can think about is the color blue.
I am blue and I am the best color. There is no other color like me that is why everyone loves me and chooses me as their favorite color. I am the most likeable color out of all the colors that exsist.
I feel like blue is trying to be super cocky, but it needs like a stronger attitude. It's nice and then "I am the best." Confused me. I can't get the tone.
ReplyDeleteAlso, so many "I"s. First paragraph is good using I for repition, the last paragraph seems on accident.
I like how u set blue off as a cocky stuckup attitude. the thing u could work on is watch how u put blue off as. It was changing way to much and I couldnt get a grasp on it. Also I like the first paragraphs repetiton if i.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you repeated the "I am" phrase on most paragraph openings. It gives it sort of a poetic feel. Maybe add a little more humor instead of stuck up ness
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